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IELTS WRITING

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DESCRIBING CHART UPWARDS

The part-time chart shows (demonstrates, illustrates, outlines) us some differences in the between (if you use a noun with a possessive preposition "of" you should use a definite article "the") numbers of women and men continuing their education after graduation from universities within the period between 1970s to 1990s in the UK. male and female (try to use synonyms) students of high educational schools (institutions).

Separate your introduction from a main body.

A number of mMales earning the post-graduate degree chart iswas very unstable (has been fluctuating), and s weit can be sees in the early seventiesth until the last ninetieseth. It decreased from 1000 toill approximately 870 students. Then _this figure? (write a subject) increased rapidly to about 900 students. But aAlthough males' chart fluctuates within 20 years, females' chart has been increasing during two decades. In the seventieseth it was only between 700 and 800. However But unexpectedly it started to increasing (after start use a verb in -ing form) e rapidly, and at the end of the ninetiesieth itn reached its hit a peak (or rocketed).

There was also a full-time studies' chart (noun is missing) ist shown. Comparing to with part-time post graduate education we see that full-time enrolled educational students numbers eeven did not hit a number of 300. Also we see that full-time education is both same for males and females (women and men, young men and ladies, etc.). At the end of the ninetiesth it only reached a number of (or approximately) about 230.

My conclusion (don't write your own opinion or conclusion in descritptions) is that both males and females prefer to studying in part-time education at their universities. And (don't start your sentence with "and", use a difference connector word) there is no big difference between their chases, the only difference, even if it is insensibly (verb to be + adjective), is that females are more hard-working than males (don't make a strong conclusion on the causes of these indicators and statistics, your purpose is to describe, but not explain why it happened).

Thanks for help!

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Comments by Aigerim:

· Do not repeat the exact words and sentence structure as it was given in a task.

· Show your introduction separately

· Focus on the main trends

· Use words with similar meanings, do not repeat a lot.

· In the1st essay you cannot express your thoughts and opinion

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